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beauty in imparfection by ~firebird1423:iconfirebird1423:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Narrative > Spoken Word


A whisp of misplased hair

  The torn jeans formly around the body

             the faded shirt snugly hanging where it is

The shoes dipped in mud

        The necklace rusted in its place

    The earing, right earing, broken

                           The straps colored gray

            The sweatshirt drapped
                            on some left alone chair

The girls smiling in
           Normality
©2006-2009 ~firebird1423
:iconfirebird1423:

Author's Comments

if i spell words wrong it is because i have done it on purpose... just to let you know.... oh and i really do have torn jeans.... really really torn jeans that my parents bother me about throwing away... along with the ratty old tank top... just using their words because to me its well im going to stop... because you could be here forever and then give up and not really read the poem...

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~Rachaelkins Nov 24, 2006, 7:57:48 PM
i dont get it.

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You only breath cause Alex does
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~firebird1423 Nov 24, 2006, 8:57:10 PM
what dont you get?
the poem
the wording
the spacing
the lines
how it was written...
what needs clearification?
:iconrachaelkins:
~Rachaelkins Nov 24, 2006, 9:15:17 PM
i just don't understand the overall meaning of the poem

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You only breath cause Alex does
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~firebird1423 Jul 8, 2007, 7:37:53 PM
the poem basically states that beauty can be found within the normality of life and it doesnt have to be "perfect" in order for there to be beauty residing within a piece of clothing or in the way that a person feels when wearing something. for me its my blessed jeans... for others it could be a necklace or perfume or the way the music feels that night.

beauty is different for every person and this poem shows not only how i can feel beautiful in what would be expected as not something to fit the todays version of "beauty" but also open the reader to get thier opinion of what they think as beautiful -now they may not think that what im wearing is "beauty" or it could be -this is only my opinion.
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~sslyd3r Jul 18, 2008, 6:17:11 PM
why the spacing and title?

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I write about the insignificant things, because everything in the world is significant, and even if only by my recognition, they need the understanding of another.
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~firebird1423 Aug 18, 2008, 7:05:28 PM
spacing is to give the poem a unnatural flow
title continues the theme of beauty does not always fit natures natural reaction to its specifications.
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~sslyd3r Aug 19, 2008, 2:04:50 PM
wow, you really put a lot of thought into every aspect of your poem, i'm a tad envious of your attention to detail

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I write about the insignificant things, because everything in the world is significant, and even if only by my recognition, they need the understanding of another.
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~firebird1423 Aug 19, 2008, 9:43:54 PM
thank you very much
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~sslyd3r Aug 20, 2008, 3:45:19 AM
no problem

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I write about the insignificant things, because everything in the world is significant, and even if only by my recognition, they need the understanding of another.
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